I Need Your Help

Help me, Lovers of Asian Fantasy! You’re my only hope. Mmmm. Sorry. I couldn’t help myself.

The Amazon Breakthrough Novel Competition is upon us all once again and I intend to enter. The first year I did this, I received outstanding feedback by posting my work on the Createspace Preview Gallery, so I’m doing that ahead of time this year. I hope what feedback I receive might help me over a hump. Who knows, maybe I’ll even get farther in the competition this year.

I’ve written once of those books with an unusual setting (China) that readers need to be eased into before the plot speeds up. I’ve done the best I can at providing atmosphere, characterization and the plot’s forward momentum. However, this is a war novel and it takes three chapters (30 pages) before the characters march off to war. I’d love to find an ingenious way for atmosphere, characterization and plot to be solid and understandable within one chapter. The site allowed me to upload the first twenty pages, but that should give you an idea of what’s happening and what I might be able to trim or reorganize.

If you’re willing to help, please go to my entry, Mourn Their Courage. I’ll be happy to provide a reciprocal critique!




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7 Responses to β€œI Need Your Help”

  1. Jemi Fraser says:

    I've got company coming in for a bit – but I'll try to get to this in the next few days! πŸ™‚

  2. Victoria Dixon says:

    Thank you and bless you, Jemi! I could tell how busy you must be from your post, so it's really appreciated!

  3. Donna Hole says:

    I'm up for it; I'll go read.


  4. Victoria Dixon says:

    Thanks so much for the comments, Donna! I've backed off backstory, but I'll try to hack out more. I'll try to contact you directly for your comments and to critique whatever you'd like read. Thanks again!

  5. Lisa Yarde says:

    I'd be happy to critique too. Good luck with your entry. Am thinking of entering the contest as well.

  6. Donna Hole says:

    I sent the e-mail Victoria. And feel free to disregard any and all if it doesn't work for you. Opinions are like bad pennies – you find them everywhere but they don't always get you much.

    I'm still working on my query. Lets see how the feedback affects you before calling in a favor. I do appreciate the offer.


  7. Victoria Dixon says:

    Excellent, Lisa! If you post a preview, I'd love to read it.

    Donna, God Bless You! Seriously. The comments were on track and even mirrored earlier problems I thought I'd fixed. Obviously not. πŸ˜€ Back to the keyboard, but rejuvenated. My eyes just slid off of the words before, but this gives me something concrete to examine. THANK YOU!

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